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Saturday, August 05, 2006

A Poem

This is an untitled poem, again written as part of my course. Thinking up titles is not my strong point - as shown by my crap post titles. Anyway, here it is:

Biting her lip,
the distraction of pain
to stop the tears from falling
Drawing blood,
a finger brushed against
a pure red droplet, her nails
carving crescent moons
into the alabaster flesh
A manifestation,
the pain made real
visible to others eyes

8 Comments:

At 10:50 AM, Blogger Jen said...

Great imagery Suz, I really enjoyed reading that.I think you should write more poems.

 
At 11:57 AM, Blogger Inspector Monkfish said...

I read it yesterday too, but wasn't sure what to say.

I spent some time pondering the significance of it.

 
At 1:27 PM, Blogger Suz said...

Thank you! I don't find it easy to write poetry, I must admit. I haven't done for a while - these were written nearly two years ago. I think I might try to write somemore.

IM - I'm interested to know what your thoughts were when you were pondering...?

 
At 2:10 PM, Blogger Inspector Monkfish said...

I'm not exactly in the most positive of places myself right now, but let's just say it seems to me that the first line could easily be, "Lifting her pen,"...

 
At 2:48 PM, Blogger Suz said...

Hm. Interesting.

I must say, for all I wrote this poem quite a while ago, it's a place I visited since.

I feel like I want to say something else, but I'm not sure what.

 
At 6:05 PM, Blogger Inspector Monkfish said...

Yes, sometimes even although the story (or in this case, poem) is old, the reasons for us discussing it now may be new.

Sometimes in the past, I have had things on my mind that I can't just come out and say, even although I sort of want to. So sometimes I would try to put a hook into the middle of a conversation that someone might attempt to reel in on, or sometimes I would open my mouth and take a breath as if to say something, and then say nothing.

 
At 6:37 PM, Blogger Suz said...

IM, I've done both of those! I have to say, I'm not the most open of people - probably a mixture of my personality and various things that have happened to me. Recent events have turned this on it's head - I've opened up to people (not everyone, specific people) more, and been surprised at myself. A whole mix of reasons why, I think.

 
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